IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#graphs #show #four #categories #fruits #three #countries #were #thousand #tonnes #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart represents the
export
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
citrus
fruits
 (Oranges, Lemons, Grapefruits and
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
show examples
) from
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
six countries
Mexico
,
Correct article usage
the U.S
show examples
U.S
Correct your spelling
U.S.
, Egypt, South Africa, Argentina, and Turkey in the year
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
2012. It is noticeable that all countries had the highest
amount
 of
export
 of different
fruits
. The highest
amount
 of Oranges exported by
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
South Africa,
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
is 100o
thousand
tons
,
while
united
Correct article usage
the united
show examples
 states exported only around 400
thousand
tons
. The highest
amount
 of lemons exported by
Mexico
, which were 500
thousand
tons
.
Interesting
Add an article
An interesting
The interesting
show examples
 fact was that
Mexico
 had the same
amount
 load of
export
 of other
fruits
. Egypt and
united
Correct article usage
the united
show examples
state
Fix the agreement mistake
States
show examples
 had very low
export
 of other
fruits
 around 10
thousand
tons
. Grapefruits were exported
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the highest value by
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
turkey with
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
400
thousand
tons
.
Mexico
 and
U.S
Correct your spelling
U.S.
 had exportation of grapefruits
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
300
thousand
tons
 and 200
thousand
tons
.
Change preposition
of.
show examples
Overall
, lemon and other fruit were exported by
Mexico
 in
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
show examples
 amounts
while
 Oranges and grapefruit
export
Add a missing verb
were export
show examples
 by South Africa and
turkey
Change the capitalization
Turkey
show examples
 respectively.
Submitted by Raj Devendra on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, fruits, mexico, amount, thousand, tons with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: