You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter ad follows:

Dear Rahul, I hope you and your family doing well. I received your letter, thanks for consulting me before taking
this
important decision of your life either you should work or study. I can recollect that you told me about your ambitions and career plans. I don't think you will enjoy your college as your ambition is totally opposite to a college student.
Also
, a
job
will expose you
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real corporate world and you can learn what you always wanted to. I
rememebr
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remember
when I passed my graduation and choose
Master's
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above
job
. Believe me, I regret my decision till now and won't like you to do the same mistake.
Also
,
market
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is growing and in
next
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2-3
year
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you will see more growth
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this
. I would really
happy
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if you choose
job
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a job
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in software engineering. I know you are very good
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coding and designing
website
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.
This
type of
job
will give you the opportunity to learn the new market trends and latest technologies, which will give you an extra edge in your growth. I am coming to Delhi
next
month,
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plan to
met
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at that time. Contact me if you need anything. Cheers, Jatin
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
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  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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