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Compare/contrast high school life and university liife

#contrast #school #life #university #liife
High
school
 and
university
 time are all precious periods which
students
 almost
experienced
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.
Although
 high
school
life
 and
university
 one have some differences, they seem alike in some ways. There are some reasons why both of them have similarities.
Firstly
, when starting high
school
 or
college
,
students
 are assigned
the
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a
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 large
of
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apply
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amount of homework. In high
school
, teachers usually assign homework
of
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for
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 many subjects to learners and they have to finish in
limited
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a limited
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 time.
University
students
need
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need to
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 enroll in various modules and each module
also
 has plenty of assignments.
Instead
 of handing in homework, they must upload
on
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it on
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 Google
classroom
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 on deadlines.
Secondly
,
parental
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the parental
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guide
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 is one of
similar
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the similar
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 reasons whether
students
 go to high
school
 or
university
. In high
school
, their parents take care of them by waking them up every morning, taking
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them to
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to
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them to
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school
 and cooking meals. After entering
college
, they are still by side to encourage them. Though
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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 are apart from their parents, parents give
supports
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support
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 in case they have difficulties. Despite their similarities, high
school
life
 and
university
life
 are
also
 different in some ways.
First,
relationships in high
school
 differ
the
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from the
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 ones at
college
. Most
students
 usually come
the
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from the
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 same town,
same
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and same
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 background, so making friends with others becomes
more
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easier. They
also
 keep in touch with their friends who were familiar to them before.
However
, people who study in
college
 usually come from different places, so getting acquainted with new friends is harder.
Second,
life
 at
university
 is more independent than
life
 in high
school
.
Students
 in high
school
 have a tendency to rely on others, so they often spend most of
time
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their time
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 studying and relaxing.
Therefore
,
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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 do not
need
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need to
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 be independent.
However
, as
university
students
, they start taking part-time jobs to gain more understanding. They
also
need
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need to
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 learn to complete work themselves,
be
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and be
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 independent for their future career. In conclusion, high
school
life
 and
university
life
 have similarities though the two lives differ in some ways.
College
life
 makes
students
 more independent to overcome
life
’s challenges
while
 high
school
students
 almost lean on others.
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