The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.

The diagrams below show the development of small fishing village its surrounding area into a large European tourist resort.
The two maps depict alterations that took place in a small coastal village in Europe over the course of 30 years,
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in 1974.
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, it can be seen that there are several major changes mainly involving the construction of hotels and road infrastructure. As the village underwent major developments and
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in providing services to the tourists as its primary economic activity has stood in place of fishing,
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, Harbour disappeared and
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with a beach stretching from west to east. Another striking change is the expansion of the village with the establishment of
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hotel
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hotels
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along the coastline on both sides of the rural area.
Subsequently
, offering sufficient
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to visitors.
Further
developments were the woodland removal to the west of the olive trees,
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which was replaced by a golf course.
Additionally
, the main road has been laid to cope with the increased traffic
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the area and
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easy access to other villages. It is interesting to note that fruits and vegetables required for hotels were supplied from extended farmland in 2004.
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