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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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It is undeniable, that the number of crimes is increasing exponentially day by day.In
this
 essay, I will discuss the causes for the rapid growth of crimes and provide a few Suggestions to prevent the same.
Firstly
, it is very common for youth to choose
Such
 paths as they have no means of source for meeting their basic needs like food and shelter.
This
 is mostly the case in all the
third
 world countries.
For example
, people in countries like India, Bangladesh and Syria are really suffering to meet their daily needs.Poverty plays a vital role, as they can't afford proper food and education they don't know how to survive.
Hence
, they choose a wrong path in order to at least have food.The amount of population plays a major factor, as there is not enough funds for the government to address these needs.In these cases, the party in power should work with NGO's and private clubs to educate people on how and whom to contact if they need a proper guidance so as to build a better life.They should
Also
 create programs to help
such
 under privileged people.
On the other hand
, some people tend to do
Such
 crimes just for adrenal rush.
For example
, young adults challenges one another to steal a pack of gum from a store or to scratch a random car. While these might not appear to be severe crimes, these can lead to more serious things like abuse and even fatalities.
Hence
, these should be addressed early on.
This
 should be done with the collaboration of parents, educators and the justice system.The punishment can be in the form of paying a fine, community service and so on.
Such
 people should be severely punished and make sure that it is not acceptable to do so. To recapitulate, irrespective of the motive and severity of the crime, it is crucial to see the root cause of the same and addressing it to reduce the crime rates. It is a must, that everyone should avoid doing crimes and to achieve that, a joined effort from the individuals, society, the government along with the private sector NGO should help people to not commit crimes even in desperate times.
Although
, we cannot eradicate crimes completely we should be able to control them and spread awareness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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