Online shopping is increasing dramatically. How could this trend affect our environment and the kinks of jobs required?

We’re living in an age when there is an ascending trend of online shopping.
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phenomenon is
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as a positive signal to economics and employment issues.
However
, in
a
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long run,
e-commercial
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e-commercials
may do more harm than good to both nature and human well-being. In the matter of
environment
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the environment
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, online shopping is the reason
of
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air pollution as long as carbon
emission
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emissions
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. These days, there is a great
quatity
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quantity
quality
of delivery vehicles which appeared in order to
fullfill
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fulfil
the needs of
costumers
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customers
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,
for example
, online shopping helps people to buy the things that are not available in their neighbourhoods,
therefore
the act of shipping is the
the
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main source of
exhauseting
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exhausting
wasted fumes and many others glasshouse emissions. Regarding of the online shopping effect on
the
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job opportunities and
traditional
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the traditional
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market, online shopping provides
seller
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sellers
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a
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working environment which does not require business premises,
consequently
,
company
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companies
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tend to employ
less
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fewer
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people. Looking into the future,
small
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the small
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retailer
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retailers
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would
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face the danger of being bankrupt, and
this
changing
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creates various opportunities for
examples
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example
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,
designer
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designers
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, online
seller
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sellers
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,
delivery
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and delivery
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drivers.
On the contrary
, the jobs that will
be create
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by online shopping might outnumber the new jobs that would be offered by the rapid
rising
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of online shopping.
To sum up
, online shopping
makes
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a great impact on human
being
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beings
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and
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environment, in
short
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term it serves as
a
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opportunity for economics but in the long run, it may cause several
of
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social problems and damage
the
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nature.
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