Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.
It is
agrue
Correct your spelling
argued
that
whether Correct word choice
apply
women
should participate in Add an article
the military
a military
military like
Add a hyphen
military-like
men
or not. While
some people think women
should be given chance
to choose Correct article usage
the chance
military
as a career , Add an article
the military
i
think some disadvantages of joining Change the capitalization
I
military
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the military
of
Change preposition
for
women
is
quite significant. On the one hand, it is undeniable that Correct subject-verb agreement
are
women
possess intelligence as good as men
, even sometimes they are trusted more than men
by their carefulness. They have also
contributed significantly to the successes in some vital areas such
as government or military. For example
, Bui Thi Xuan is an outstanding female general of Tay Son who led Vietnamese soldiers to defeat invaders from Qing
dynasty. Correct article usage
the Qing
Besides
, letting women
join the army also
shows advances about
sexual equality. Through thousands of Change preposition
in
year
in the past, Fix the agreement mistake
years
military
was considered Add an article
the military
as
a Change preposition
apply
men
responsibility. Change noun form
man's
Therefore
, when women
embark on military
, Add an article
the military
this
not only helps men
to reduce the burden,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
make
them more Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
sympathy
to Replace the word
sympathetic
men
. Moreover
, when some of
Change preposition
apply
women
get achievements in military
, they will be more confident and they can raise their position which leads to more Correct article usage
the military
possitive
views of sexists. Correct your spelling
positive
On the other hand
, because Correct article usage
the millitary
millitary
is a career that requires strength a lot, Correct your spelling
military
men
have overwhelming
advantage compared to Add an article
an overwhelming
the overwhelming
women
when men
are biologically much more strong
than Correct word choice
stronger
women
. Women
is
likely to find Change the verb form
are
more
difficult to take military equipment or walk Correct pronoun usage
it more
in
a long distance. In conclusion, Change preposition
apply
although
there are some reasons supporting women
to join the military, i
believe that they Change the capitalization
I
also
should consider carefully about
choosing it as their careerChange preposition
apply
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
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