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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

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INTRODUCTION: It has been argued that libraries are no longer necessary in today’s world because of the development of computer technology. While I accept that the online libraries are of great value, it is not to say that libraries on the Internet could completely replace physical libraries. BODY: On the one hand, digital libraries have various positive effects on our lives. The
first
merit worth
Accept comma addition
merit, worth
 mentioning is that virtual libraries allow users to search for
information
 in an easier way without having to travel to public libraries. Individuals can look for the
information
 at their fingertips by technological devices, which is beneficial for those who have a hectic schedule.
Moreover
, the online library can store numerous e-books in digital form, meaning that the local authorities can reduce the space occupied by books and cut a great deal of money for renting a building. These budgets should be diverted to more critical issues
such
 as health service improvement and educational reform.
On the other hand
, I firmly convinced that it is not a waste to keep public libraries for some of their benefits.
Firstly
, libraries usually provide quiet areas, which is an excellent environment for people to enjoy reading books since they are not prone to be distracted by things surrounding them.
For example
, my friends claim that they can only concentrate when they are in a quiet study area
such
 as the environment in the library.
Secondly
, it is available for all ages, especially the elderly who prefer travelling to public libraries to access
information
. In fact, adult people are probably computer-illiterate;
therefore
, they can not glues their eyes on the screen to research
information
 and read books. CONCLUSION In conclusion, though the clear benefits of online libraries, I believe that it is worth spending money on maintaining traditional libraries. (301 words)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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