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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain why you want to take time off work give details of the amount of time you need suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Rose, Hope you find
this
 letter in
pink
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the pink
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 state of your
heath
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health
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. I am writing
this
 massive with regard to a request for some unpaid leave
this
 month. It’s been a long time I did not visit my home country so, I want to go there and my sister’s wedding is going to
held
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be held
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over
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apply
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there
next
 month.
Therefore
 I want to be there on time and need off from work.
Furthermore
, I need three-week
vacations
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vacation
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 as I will attend some events there. I am going after three years,
therefore
, I need
this
 much time to meet everyone and to attend every function without any hurry to come back.
Moreover
, I will do overtime after returning from my home but I already give training to Monga about my work , he will handle the work on behalf of
my
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 when I will not be here.
In addition
, I will be in touch with the company through email or phone calls. I am looking forward to hearing a positive response from your side, Yours sincerely, John
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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