Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Bad experience When I was 6 I had to visit the dentist for a checkup. I was nervous and scared since it is my

first

time, I want there with my

father

, we arrived at 4:15 PM, my appointment was at 4:30 PM. While were waiting a nurse came to me to ask me a few questions, I remember that she was angry and annoyed by something that I did not know, which made me feel uncomfortable. After that we meat the doctor.he did not look at me at the

first

he just talk it with my

father

. I told him that I was scared but he did not comfort me,

instead

, he side that I should not be scared, he did not explain anything to me, I cloud not understand what he was going to do, my

father

explained to me.

Then

the nurse asked me to lie on the chair.than the doctor started to work. He was rough so I start to cry loudly. He tried to force me to stop crying. I did not because of that he started yelling at me. I cried more, my

father

told the doctor to stop. He refused to say that I was acting and I’m not in real pain. My

father

insisted to him to stop.so he did, after that experience, I had a difficult time to trust doctors again

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

230 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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glamour
wealth
achievements
portrayed
overshadow
influenced
lifestyles
unrealistic
expectations
values
promoting
hard work
perseverance
inspire
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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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