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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to ask for
further
 information regarding the sports club. I am a recent student studying computers in
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St.Xavier college. I am an active badminton player
,
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 and spend my early mornings playing the sport.
College
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 has everything for a student to focus on their career;
however
, it is lacking in a sports centre. When asked in the reception, I was referred to your sports club and many others around the city.
However
, your club is the nearest to the residential college, and other students
has
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recommonded
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recommended
 it for the flexible timings available. Could you please provide more information on
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acilities available? I am a keen swimmer, and I spend some time swimming after a play or a gym session. I would like to know information on memberships available and the costs. Could you
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umber of active members for badminton, especially in mornings
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 It will help me in finding someone sharing the same sport. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,
Srinth
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Srinath
 Pallamparthy
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