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It was predicted that people in the 21st century would have much more free time than in the past. To what extent has this prediction come true?

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Well,
this
 was estimated that the generation of the 21st centenary will have more spare moments as compared to
an
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 ancient generation.And,it was
also
 assumed in previous times that
people
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 be free from various duties in the coming century
due to
 formulations of techniques.To some extent,
this
 estimation comes true. First of all, it is a fact that
life-style
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 and usage of timing have
been
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changed in
21st
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 century as compared to old times,
for instance
,
as
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people
 were doing their all tasks by
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hand because they did not have any man-made appliances to do their jobs like in many nations, all the household tasks they did by themselves because they did not have any electronic gadgets like washing machines for laundry, electronic gas-stoves, microwaves and oven, vacuum cleaners for cleaning and even they did not have private vehicles in the past to go here and there in the third world.But,when some countries
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started doing innovations to make devices to save time in different ways
then
people
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 that
populace
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 in the twenty-first centenary
will
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 get lots of leisure space,
thus
 in some ways
due to
developments
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 of so many types of machines,these are saving their priceless time.
On the other hand
,it can not be neglected that even in the presence of those creations,
people
 are getting very busy in their lives as
people
 are becoming more career-oriented,so they do not want to sit free in their
home
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 and everybody wants to be independent.
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another reason for the hectic schedule is rising prices and
due to
 that they are used to
do
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 more work to satisfy their basic and luxury needs.
That is
 why assumptions about free space in the twenty-first centenary are proved wrong from some
point
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 of
views
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.Because,if they save their moments by using human-made machines
then
 they have to work more to buy those devices and vehicles.
Therefore
,there is another thing
is
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the internet and by using that
people
 are keeping busy themselves by surfing websites and by doing chit-chat with their friends
among
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all over the world all day and night. In the end,it can be said that
people
 made estimations in the ancient days
due to
 the inventions of science but these originations are playing a significant role in keeping
people
 busy and the Internet is one of the most important resources for their hectic schedule.Because of these
reasons
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 estimations are not proving correct properly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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