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Recent advances in air travel have focused only on those sitting in upper class and have left other passengers with no benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A few decades ago air movements were available only for rich sectors of society. These days, fortunately, air travels are going to become very common, because it is a fast, comfortable, and cheap way to cope with a long distance. The majority of people buys economy class tickets, but they recon, they have deprived any benefits. I totally agree with
this
 idea and in
this
 essay,I will explain my opinion.
Firstly
, we all realize, flying is expensive and not only because of the cost of fuel. There is so much more that goes into a ticket price. What actually makes flying so expensive are crew costs, using airports, taxes, regular maintenances of planes and, of course, non-flying part of the business. But few people know, that proceeds from the selling economy seat tickets only cover the cost of the light.
Hence
, economy class is not how airlines make money. Revenue is in premium classes.
As a result
, the vast majority of the profit comes from
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 minority of passengers.
Secondly
,
this
 case is a demonstration of how to sell the same product for different prices to different people. The overall product is the same - a flight from point A to point B. What is different is the experience within the plane.
That is
 why the airlines are interested in improving amenities and food for upper-class passengers to sell expensive tickets. It just makes more money.
Therefore
, if an airline could fill a lane full of business and
first class
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 passengers, it would. In conclusion, the experience of flying is the luxury itself and not a lot of money goes to the airline. I agree that recent advances in air travel are focused on premium sections since most of the revenue comes from there.
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