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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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With the advancement in science and technology, today human beings cultivate better yield of crops than they do in the past and production has increased multi-folds. Even
then
, a huge diaspora of the population across the globe are unable to afford the suffice bread and have to face hunger.
This
 has raised the alarm in the world's leading organisations working for the betterment of mankind. In
this
 essay, I will illuminate the reasons behind
this
 burning issue and would recommend some practical approaches, if adopted, can help in mitigating
this
 problem. To being with, one of the primary reasons for making incapable to buy food is unemployment. Due to lack of regular earnings and skyrocketing prices of basic commodities, it has become tough for the people to fulfil their basic daily meal requirements. As per the statistics unveiled by the UN, 35% of the world's population is unemployed. So, the huge diaspora of mankind has to sleep empty stomach. To alleviate
this
 issue, the young generation and entrepreneurs of the nations can work in tandem to set up their startups and industries in the rural districts to generate employment, opportunities for the local people.
This
 will give them a source of income and will make them able to have the money for buying basic food items for themselves and their families.
Moreover
, the administration should
also
 support
this
 course of action by providing rebate in taxes, and issuing licenses to set up plants more frequently. So,
this
 will turn out to be a win-win situation for all the stakeholders - employees, employer and the government. To conclude, I recapitulate that
this
 issue of hunger cannot be solved by an individual or the government single-handedly. All the parties involved have to work together and generate jobs in each sector of society so that everyone can become capable enough to procure sufficient food for his family.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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