Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think crime is determined by human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

Although
unemployment is gradually decreasing, it’s still an important problem for society. Some people believe that if the government were giving phones and making sure unemployed people have
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eliable network connection, the rate of unemployment would be significantly reduced. I am not sure whether or not
this
is the best way of using public money to resolve
this
issue. Until the Internet was widely used, people looking for a
job
had had to go from place to place and ask employers whether or not they had been hiring. Nowadays, the Internet is the main place for employers to announce that they’re hiring. Someone seeking a
job
can use a variety of services like LinkedIn or pracuj.pl, but to do so they need
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nternet connection and a mobile phone to call potential employers. If these things were publicly funded, people without a
job
would be able to find a source of income almost instantly.
However
,
this
solution has many disadvantages.
For instance
, what would happen with mobile phones when a person succeeds to find a
job
? They can’t be thrown away because that would waste loads of money and harm our planet. If they were forwarded from freshly employed to newly unemployed,
this
would solve
this
issue, but it’s
also
a huge logistics operation and
furthermore
, it gives enormous space for fraud.
For example
, some people may keep their phones even though they were hired. In a nutshell, it is crucial to help unemployed people with taxpayers’ money. In my opinion, giving Internet access and mobile phones to them is a good idea, but has its flaws and should be discussed
further
.
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