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By punishing murders with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The bar graph reveals the results of a questionnaire about how people prefer buying and drinking
coffee
 and tea in five Australian metropolises. Overall, it can be seen that most of the people prefer to go cafe' for tea and
coffee
 over buying instant and fresh
coffee
 in the
last
 month. It is important to note that almost 62% of the population in Sydney went to a cafeteria', which was
second
 highest after Melbourn.
However
, the percentages of instant and fresh
coffee
 were quite similar in Sydney.
On the other hand
, residents went to a
coffee
 shop' for buying and drinking caffeine were at a peak in Melbourn. As more as almost 64% of people prefer to go to the cafe' in the
last
 4 weeks, which was drastically higher than the other two options. In the case of Brisbane, the least percentage of inhibitions prefer to buy fresh
coffee
 but, tends to buy fresh
coffee
 and went to the
coffee
 shop' inclined dramatically. It was almost 55% and 52% respectively against 35% of fresh
coffee
. In Hobart, instant espresso selling reached a peak. 55% of residents' main choice was it.
Also
, more persons went to the cafe' in the
last
 month, wheres fresh cappuccino was not much popular in Hobart. Now MI fans are praying to win of CSK for qualifying.
This
 is the beauty of CSK...
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