Some people think that a huge a mount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays more and more
money
is spent on the protection of wild animals. Some people believe that
this
money
could be better spent on the human population. I strongly disagree with
this
statement for several reasons.
Fisrtly
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Firstly
First
, in the
last
decades
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globalization and intensive farming methods
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are
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having a
profund
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profound
impact on the population of wild animals.
Furthermore
,
this
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methods are extremely dangerous for the
enviroments
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environment
environments
as they contain a
hufe
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huge
number of chemical pollutants.
As a result
, desertification is increasing and more and more land isn't suitable for farming. Studies suggest that nearly 20% of all animals death are related to human activities. To cite an example, I used to live nearby a chemical farming industry that has been closed because they
contrubuited
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contributed
contribute
to the
exticion
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extinction
of a large number of different animals species.
Secondly
, If we compare the amount of
money
that has been spent on the protection of different species with the
money
that has been spent in
reasearches
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research
researches
researchers
and studies for the human population, we can notice that it is a
relative
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small
expenses
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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