IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2.5

Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#someone #life #luck
There is an assumption that fortune the key to a person's achievements. I would say
that is
 an erroneous conclusion because the advocates of claim ignore alternative determines relevant is discuss. Indeed, fortune can help people achieve their goals.
That is
 why sometimes fierce competition may make the value of efforts unable to magnify. People still can not achieve success. If there is
unexpect
Correct your spelling
unexpected
 happen beyond
thier
Correct your spelling
their
 ability, like in the human, material, financial and other emergencies, people may get unexpected gains.
For example
, you have more advantage than your competitor, due to late for or absence, you may get the job. As matter of fact, The above is not a stroke of luck. There are other factors hidden under it. If you
Add the comma(s)
,
show examples
not outstanding
you'wont
Correct your spelling
you wont
you won't
 have the chance to get into the
last
 round of interview. So blessing requires some effort to do the premise. Other success factors mean patience is
also
 critical. Many aims in life are too
immunse
Correct your spelling
immense
immune
 to achieve it,
For example
, becoming
b
Add an article
the
show examples
est writer, get the best
employeer
Correct your spelling
employer
employees
employee
ect
Correct your spelling
etc
. Even with a windfall, these things may have to wait. In a word, patience is not a decisive factor in our success. Other factors
such
 as patience are
also
 important.
Submitted by 1339232976 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • aims
  • determination
  • resilience
  • opportunities
  • effort
  • planning
  • unpredictability
  • innovation
  • perseverance
  • perception
  • sustainability
  • adaptation
  • networking
  • initiative
  • random chance
What to do next:
Look at other essays: