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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Foreign tourists have to pay more as compare to local visitors for cultural and old things.I believed that our coming communities have to pay more because that come to visit new places. On one side, foreign people have to come to our country to visit new places and spend bundles of money to fulfil their requirement because our country Pakistan is the famous traveller attraction and it has old fortresses,towers and other architecture.Especially sightseer has come to see the beauty of Karakoram highway which as ancient silk roads. If some visitor visited another country they have to watch more places and have to pay more due to travel expense.For sample, a lastest month I have visited the museum with my family and some close relatives.There I had a chance to meet some visitor they were very satisfied.In the museum there was a very ancient thing at the time of independence with each picture there was its description as well.I was really shocked that they were too much crazy about to collect their information and they were having a deep discussion among them.In them
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few are senior citizens. Turning to another side of the argument,there are some places there foreigner do not spend a lot of time.There are many places which are very of cost and some places have very little cost.So they feel much relax and enjoy.
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earmost time I had a chance to visited badshahi mosque.I saw there were foreign visitors as well.The entrance fees were 20 rupees per person.It was
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ocal community.As per my opinion,visitors have to pay more because they are found in different places.
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