Modern cultures around the world have become similar when compared to the past. What are the reasons. Is it a positive or negative development?

In modern society, many countries'
cultures
have become similar compared to
few
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a few
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decades ago. Most countries have their own traditional
cultures
such
as
clothes
, food and constructures.
However
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increased
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and
this
reason
people
can contact other
cultures
easily
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more easily
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than before.
In addition
, consequent of some
people
think traditional
cultures
are too old compared to the other
country
's modern
cultures
, modern
cultures
are becoming similar. Some
people
say
this
phenomenon has pros and cons. Yet, In my opinion, I believe there are more
drawback
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drawbacks
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sides.
Firstly
, traditional culture is the
country
's unique culture.
For instance
, In Korea, there are traditional
clothes
called 'HanBok'.
This
is not only
clothes
but
also
includes the
history
of Korea. If the colour of
Hanbok
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the Hanbok
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is bright means the
people
who wore the
clothes
are included in the high royal family. It shows
Korea
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Korean
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culture was hierarchies.
Likewise
, many countries have their own
history
in their traditional
cultures
and all of
history
is unique.
Additionally
, I believe that traditional
cultures
are including the
history
of the
country
. Unless
people
do not want to preserve their own
cultures
, that
lead
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to
people
to forget
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their
history
.
Furthermore
, a nation
which forgot
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that has forgotten
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their
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its
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history
does not have a future. There is no doubt that
history
is the
best
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most
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significant in
country
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a country
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.
Therefore
, traditional
cultures
have to
kept
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be kept
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by the nation. In conclusion, modern
cultures
around the world become similar compared to
few
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a few
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decades ago. Some
people
say there are positive and negative effects.
However
, In my opinion, traditional
cultures
include various
thing
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things
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about the
cultures
.
Hence
, the nation has to preserve
their
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its
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own
cultures
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culture
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.
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