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Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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in the modern era, an increase in the number of
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examinations is the major concern across the countries. With each passing day, students spend a lot of time while dealing with its preparation that really made their lives complicated, there is enough chance for improvement. Huge numbers of candidates do react differently
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 holds important carrier value. Pen and paper pattern is used widely in most countries now. They are
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ign of
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raditional system. We must ensure every generation has
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omfort to them.
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ndividual basis. Undoubtedly, one of the benefits of
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 paperless system is
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another
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ise and fall in health issues.
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 test is another area where governments and private groups or individuals can share responsibility. All students are more likely to suffer stress issue at a great level. Since developed nations have always been far ahead in
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. In conclusion, even though time changes. While people may vary in their opinions. I think only positive elements can bring more benefits.
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, the Government and students to play a vital role to solve
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a paperless s
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 best way to do it.
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