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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs ( for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has always been a thought, by a few , that free public employment should not be optional as a section of high school programmes. In my opinion, I believe that community help should be made compulsory because of the numerous benefits. In
this
 article, I will highlight a few advantages that come along with offering
this
 assistance to society.
First
 and foremost, the duty to the community gives high school graduates an opportunity for hands-on experience.
Although
 a lot has been taught at the academies, children rarely get physical experience;
this
 will help the students to face various challenges while in practice;
for instance
, the Ugandan Electoral Commission has recently offered public jobs to senior six leavers to help them gain working knowledge.
Furthermore
, public work makes the society a better place in the long run; to illustrate, in Nigeria, the cleaning of the cities as part of community help has now made the entire country beautiful. It is obvious that serving the public is indeed beneficial.
In addition
, the students feel accomplished, independent and fulfilled;
for example
, helping the society through activities
such
 as charity makes the students feel useful to the public;
this
 ,in turn, will make them better citizens. In fact, 80% of childhood crimes, like drugs, robbery and alcoholism, have been prevented by engaging the youth in necessary activities.
Nevertheless
, I suggest that
this
 assistance to the public should be encouraged by offering a few benefits
such
 as transport, lunch and water;
this
 will make the duty more just in case it is made a mandatory. To end, it is my perspective that public employment should be made 'a must' as part of high school courses. If students do not get
this
 free experience, there's likely going to be a problem of job adaptation later in their lives.
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