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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in modern world? Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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Introduction There are many cities/towns and even countries which are completely dependent on
tourism
 for their revenues.
Tourism
 is the major industry and occupation of people in these places. It has been the major contributor in
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rowth and development of these places.
However
, if it operated in an unorganized manner, it could
also
 result in trouble for people at large. Advantages
Tourism
 adds to the growth and prosperity of
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conomy by bringing in foreign currency to the economy, it contributes to the per capita income of in
tourism
 reliant places. It
also
 facilitates other related industries like hotel and hospitality, transport, recreational or adventure activities, handicraft industries etc. It helps in spreading the knowledge about the cultural heritage, cuisines and traditions across different places. Places like Thailand, Goa, Kerala, Cambodia, Bali etc are
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 places and are flourishing with the help of it. Disadvantages
On the other hand
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 not organized and well managed, it could result polluting the surrounding and environment by the tourists, damage to the historical and heritage sites where the tourists need to be careful with their conduct etc. Example, some local tourists end up writing their names on historical monuments in India, people throw plastic bags and other useless things on the beaches etc. which not only reduces the attraction value of these places eventually but
also
 harm the environment. Conclusion/My Opinion I think
tourism
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rosperity of any economy but
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 in bringing people across the world closer to each other. It is the source of livelihood for so many people that the advantages are far too many while the drawbacks can be easily tackled.
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