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Topic: Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#topic #people #purchase #food #cook #home #trend
Presently, several people prefer to buy
food
 at restaurants more than
cook
 at home. From my point
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if
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 view, buying
food
have
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 many benefits. Many countries around the world, have a
lot
 of nice restaurants, so people want to buy delicious
food
in
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there.
However
, some people think that it
is disadvantages
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 because
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in
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each day, people eat a
lot
 of foods. If they always spend a
lot
 of money
in
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 meals, they will waste their money a
lot
.
For example
, more and more people have delivery
food
. In some eateries are very expensive prices, and when people delivery
food
 to serve in their houses, some eateries will increase prices
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about 40
bath
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. It is very expensive and if they do like
this
 every day. Their money will lose a
lot
.
On the other hand
, a
lot
 of people argue that people purchase
food
 have a
lot
 of benefits because it is very comfortable and faster than
cook
. Instance, many countries encounter
the
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Covin 19, so they must
to
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quarentine
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quarantine
quarantined
 in their house. There are many delivery companies
such
 as
food
 landa and grab, so if they order in these companies, they will have a discount around 5-10
percents
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.
Moreover
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people just wait
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food
 approximately 10-20 minutes. They will arrive at their house.
Thus
, purchasing cuisines are very comfortable, easier and quicker than
cook
food
 at home.
Last
 but not least, it has coupons and discounts, so it is not expensive with customers. To sum up, everyone would rather buy meals than
cook
 at home. In
addiction
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, there are both benefits and drawbacks. Even though, I believe that advantages are greater.
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