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Some people think that teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subjects they are best at or they are most interested in. To what extent do you agree?

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A considerate number of people are in the opinion of students giving more emphasis on the subjects of interest while others are in the favour of the most likeable one's. Many believe that those who are more inclined towards their favourite subjects
such
 as
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 or environmental science should be given more importance as compared to those which are the least preferred. In
this
 essay, I will share my point of view on
this
 matter and will throw some light.
Firstly
, despite having some preferences, knowledge about other subjects are equally important at base-level and focus should be equally distributed to have a good foundation. Having a priority field of study can enhance interest in studies but
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 of academics should not be neglected
such
 as Sanskrit that brings us close to our ancient
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 scriptures.
This
 helps us to preserve our language which has been an aesthetic part of our culture.
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, one can be called as "Jack of all trade" for having equal distribution of focus on all the books
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