You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you with regards to a brochure that caught my attention recently, for a one-week trekking trip in the hills. I would like to express my interest in participating in the event. Since I am recuperating from a major accident a few months ago, it would be really helpful if you could arrange a slot for me to join the tour, as a part of my therapy requires walking; to exercise my legs.
Also
, I am an avid walker, love to explore nature, especially in cold climates. The pamphlet
however
did not contain the agenda of
this
trip,
however
, if you could share it with me, I can be prepared to carry all necessary items. Let me
also
point out that, due to my recovery process, it may be a little difficult for me to catch up with the others.
Nevertheless
, I am very keen on joining the trek, and make sure that nobody will need to wait for me. Hoping that you would consider my interest. Thanking you, yours sincerely, Peter.
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