Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, it is suggested that young ones affected the adverse factors by fascinating

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gotten plenty of interests rather than they actually had. In

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oungster but personally, I agree that the critical results which young people had extremely compulsion to maintain the beautiful and charming lifestyle in their ordinary lives.

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with, famous people normally provide

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style for the youth generation, using their attractive physical features

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as suitable body proportions and sophisticated makeup. These offered gorgeous and fancy products' information have valuable influences for someones who is into

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ashion industry or who try to gain new trends knowledge for preparing their achievements in the future.

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one of the best celebrities as

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esigner always research the quality clothes for suitable each famous person because the designer insists

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the importance of celebrities' intense influences for

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oungster.

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case, it can be seen that celebrities absolutely have

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lead the young people's trends.

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, popular stars' effects are not always positive for young ones.

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because, as mentioned above, those celebrities tend to remain beautiful lifestyles so, young men tend to follow their lives.

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, minors started heavy makeup at the primary schools and adolescents' consumption patterns had changed to purchase useless items, even though those goods are expensive.

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, in Korea in the year

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010s, one superstar had contracted the North-Face company which produces high prices outers, after

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, most

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bought it and wore at the school. Followed the other problem is, if some students could not have those items, they had been discriminated by peers.

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I feel that famous people could attack young people's life as vicious effects. In conclusion,

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celebrities having positive influences for students and youth generations, they are more likely to bring

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egative situation to the student's lifestyle.

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, it is convincing that the relevant entertainment businesses should control the

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's industry like well-refined.