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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I was very impressed after completing the cooking
course
 offered by Happy to Cook. Even though the
course
 was limited to Indian food, but it really helped me develop my cutting and chopping skills which are common for all cuisines.
Moreover
, Mr Kumar, our instructor and mentor
was
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 very patient and his live demonstrations on various Indian
dishes
 really helped me.
Furthermore
, I
also
 really enjoyed the group task in which we formed teams to cook a few traditional
dishes
. Having said that, since completing my
course
last
 month, I have already cooked around a dozen time. I have cooked a no of
dishes
 ranging from palak paneer to chicken biriyani and my entire family was really flattered in my cooking skills.
Additionally
, I would
also
 request you to start a European Cooking
Course
 in which all the traditional European
dishes
 like pasta & pizza to name a few, can be taught as meticulously as the previous one. I would be really much interested in joining the
course
 as I am a big fan of
such
 cuisine. Thank you and looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Debjit
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