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Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently organised an all-day meeting in your
hotel
 and the purpose of
this
 letter is to give you some feedback provided by the participants.
Firstly
, I am going to write down what they liked about it. Everyone was glad that the
hotel
 has a parking lot and that it was free for those who were attending an event.
In addition
, there were several compliments about the chairs, since it was a long meeting, many individuals were concerned about their comfort prior to the event,
however
, it was not a problem at all. In regards to the problems, the main one was about the food served for lunch. Most of the participants complained about the lack of variety on the menu, especially the ones who are vegetarians because there was only one kind of salad available. I have a suggestion in order to help with
this
 issue. Since the number of vegetarians is increasing every day, the
hotel
 should consider having a salad buffet, with more diversity. I hope
this
 feedback is useful for you and for your
hotel
 and look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Arthur Oliveira
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