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Children in many countries are eating more fast food and convenience snacks. Why are children doing this and how serious are the consequences?

#children #countries #food #convenience #snacks #consequences
Dear Sir, My name is Guri and I am writing
this
 letter to you regarding the article published in the June 2012 issue of your magazine about
Gandhiji
. I appreciate your efforts but there was one mistake in the article. The article showed a wrong birth date and place of
Gandhiji
. I am sending some books written on
Gandhiji
.
Also
, I am sending you a list of some useful websites and English translation of the autobiography of
Gandhiji
, which will provide all the information you require.
Further
, I think It would be a great idea to pay more attention to the life and word of the
Gandhiji
 rather than focusing on the events that happened in his life. The material which I am sending you along with
this
 letter will help you to understand the message of
Gandhiji
.
However
, If you want to know more about him, I would be happy to offer my services to you. I look forward to reading the
next
 issue in your magazine. Yours Faithfully, Guri
Submitted by Guri on

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