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obesity and sugar drinks, should people be educated or new taxes on sugary drinks implemented

#obesity #sugar #drinks #people #taxes
People
 being overweight is a big problem in our society and it is mostly related to sugar consumption. One solution could be to put
taxes
 on sugary
drinks
 and other could be to educate the community about it.
This
 essay will argue that educating the public is better in the long run and that consumers will still pay the extra money for sugary
drinks
. Education is the base to change
people
 behaviours.
People
 tend to realise that their habits are bad when others teach them about it. A study shows that when a group of
people
 were educated on how sugary beverages contributed to obesity, 9 out of 10 stopped buying those. It proves that teaching
people
 about these unhealthy
drinks
 make them stop consuming them.
On the other hand
, tax on sugary
drinks
 will not be made
people
 stop buying it.
People
 tend to pay any among of money for goods they like.
For example
, when
taxes
 were put on alcohol
people
 continue buying them. With
this
 in mind,
taxes
 would not stop
people
 from drinking sugary
drinks
, it would just make
people
 pay more for them. To conclude, sugary
drinks
 are a big contributor to obesity and there are various ways to reduce the consumption of these
drinks
such
 as education and add
taxes
 to them.
However
, education is far better to reduce
people
 drinking sugary beverages.
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