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In future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the increasing development worldwide,
countries
 are transforming different locations as tourist spots for the public.
This
 change will definitely attract local citizens to explore their own
country
 for vacations. I agree that people would make plans for holidays in their own
country
 rather than foreign
countries
 for the following reasons. Certainly,
countries
 are progressing towards enhancement of the cities and surroundings to convert them into ideal vacation spots. Indeed, government id
also
 supporting their nations to develop in order to increase the economy of the
country
. In India,
for instance
, cities like Kurg, Manali, Kasauli and Nanital are the famous and popular hill spots where people like to go on trips. If these places were not maintained and enhanced periodically, it might not have attracted masses o spend their holidays. Beauty and the proper maintenance will help these places to be ideal vacation points.
Moreover
, local cities are comparatively cheaper than in foreign
countries
. Many cannot afford to spend on going abroad which is a plus point for their own nation itself as the money spent within the
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ountry will help it to grow.
Also
, a few destinations abroad are hyped and people do not want to waste their incomes. Their fun and leisure time can be valued in locations around. Switzerland,
for example
, would be a costly deal in near future and the same kind of atmosphere may be available at different other parts of their
country
 as well.
Nevertheless
, they should explore their own nation to save money and help in the development of their place where they live. In conclusion, considering the future benefits in terms of economy and affordability within their own nation, many will prefer nearby locations for holidays. I agree with the growth of the
country
 and exploring it for vacation purpose.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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