The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

There are growing concerns today about the storage of private data by major internet
companies
like Facebook and Google. In my opinion, the disadvantages of
this
trend outweigh its conveniences. These
companies
themselves would argue their intentions are primarily to provide better services.
This
relates
first
of all to advertising. Facebook,
for example
, tracks user behaviour and
then
allows advertisers to target audience segments in order to show them relevant advertising. An individual might
therefore
see ads related to the kinds of restaurants and music they enjoy most.
Secondly
, the
information
is used to create helpful services for consumers. Google maps is a good example of an entirely free platform used by millions that
follows
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individuals
, sells
information
to businesses, and makes life more convenient without any obvious drawbacks or pernicious intent.
However
, the misuse of big data has begun already and will only become worse in the future. The advertisements targeted at
individuals
are not always harmless. During the
last
presidential election in the United States, foreign governments sought out vulnerable groups and fed them false
information
to influence voting behaviour. Unethical
companies
use the advanced targeting tools in the same way, often locating vulnerable
individuals
and encouraging their worst impulses by indulging coping mechanisms ranging from fast food to barely legal pharmaceuticals.
This
is only the beginning as
this
information
becomes more comprehensive there are legitimate concerns that authoritarian regimes working in tandem with
companies
will be able to create all-knowing police states and human rights abuses will become the norm. In conclusion, the marginal benefits of access to personal
information
by private
companies
do not outweigh both current and future negatives. It is
therefore
important that governments regulate
companies
and
individuals
attempt to take back a degree of control.
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