12. Some people think high-end technology can prevent and cut down the rate of committing crime. Do you agree or disagree?

There is
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doubt that technology has been progressively getting wider. While some people associate
this
fact with the decrease in criminality, others argue that
this
is completely false. I completely agree with the former statement, and in
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First
, the advance of technology has collaborated to develop a sensation of being watched.
This
happens especially because of the presence of cameras, drones, and satellites. To illustrate, it is possible to find a picture of entire cities on Google Maps.
As a result
, criminals, who used to act hiddenly - afraid of being discovered and receiving their punishment - have avoided places with
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devices.
Second
, high education
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been more democratic, and accessible to vulnerable communities. The reason for that happens is because educational institutions have been able to offer not only a wide range of online courses but
also
cheaper than ever before. Research shows that a higher level of education is directly associated with a low rate of theft. If high technology had not been developed, the poor class would not have had the opportunity to access
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studies
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and would have fallen into the crime world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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