Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema.

These days
people
have multiple
platform
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to watch
movie
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such
as
phones
and
tablet
and so on a segment of society believe that we can see
film
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the film
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on
phones
other
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individual believes that it is full enjoy to see e
movies
in a
cinema
.
To begin
with,
now a days
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Technology made everyone life very easy they don't need to go
cinema
for
movies
they can watch
movies
at their home on horns they don't have to
need
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wait for tickets the more they spend on ticket their money they can get
subscription
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of Netflix can watch in a low cost they can watch
movie
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a movie
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on
phones
comfortably by sitting on their beds for couches we can eat anything
what
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we like to eat in a low-cost we can watch
movies
in a cheap of cost hours with to eat in a low-cost we can watch
movies
in a cheap of cost with our friends Hans it is the easy way to watch
movie
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a movie
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in a low price.
In
contrast
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watching
movie
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a movie
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on
theatre
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it is
a
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very enjoyable because they use high Technology machines and sound system the
cinema
are
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fully equipped most of the
people
like to watch
movies
on
cinema
instead
of watching
movies
on
tablet
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a tablet
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because we can not watch
movies
all the time on
phones
and
tablet
some time they got
board
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people
like to watch
movies
with their friends on weekends
thus
, individuals can watch
movies
without any interruption in
cinema
. In conclusion, it
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on
people
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it is more interesting and joyful than watching
movies
on Phone or
Tablet
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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