Even though Globalization affects the world’s economics in a very positive way, its negative sides should not be forgotten. Discuss..

Everything has tow sides in the
world
, and so has the prosses of
globalization
too. The
effects
of
globalization
on the
world
economy are diverted. We must acknowledge that the negative
effects
are from a different kind than the positive ones.
Therfor
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Therefore
the negative sides, like low
paiment
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payment
in less developed
countries
are important to
conciderate
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considerate
concentrate
. If we take the Eurozone
for
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example, the economic changes according to the
gloablisation
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globalisation
globalization
process are huge. Many companies have transferred their factories into cheaper production
earies
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varies
eateries
to
compeat
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compete
in the
world
markes
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market
markets
. The results are rising unemployment rates in the “old industrial
countries
”. In regard to the other
countries
on the
world
market,
such
as China,
this
job transfer is a big opportunity. But no one can
denie
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deny
that the consequences for the less developed
countries
where
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flourished, based on
availability
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the availability
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of cheap employees are highly important:
globalization
based on
this
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facts brings
enviromantal
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environmental
problems.
Nevertheless
, there are
also
posive
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positive
reasons for globlaistaional
effects
. In
general
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it is remarkable that there is a new tendency in “Thinking Global”.
For instance
, people are willing to
leran
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learn
more languages and get educated about
othe
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other
the
cultures.
Countries
fromaly
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formally
knowen as undeveloped,
such
as India, are getting chances to be the main leader in a certain field. All in
all
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it can be said that the
effects
of
globalization
are enormous. The
unerstanding
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understanding
of economic processes has changed completely. It is important to think in bigger terms, not just about the
owen
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own
country. The positive things that
this
globalization
process
have
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brought must sensible us for the negative sides. The
all over
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aim should be a
world
in balance, but
this
has yet to come.
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