The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, its often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever. Discuss both points of view, and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
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is a platform which
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information
and communication
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all around the world.
this
issue
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controversial because many
people
suggest that
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should be controlled, while
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other
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argue
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that
internet
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should be free to
access
.
This
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internet
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a huge impact
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the development of
information
and communication technology. Nowadays,
internet
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become
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a tool to find every
information
, which
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people
easier to find what
information
they need, and
people
can
access
everything on it.
However
,
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also
can be dangerous if it does not have any restriction.
Internet
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has so many dangerous webs,
such
as porno and drugs seller, it can
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access
by everyone.
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is used as a filter, so
people
can use
wisely
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. There
is
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so many negative impacts if
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is not controlled,
for
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our children can be brainwash from the negative content that
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see
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and they can act weird or doing sex as an impact from watch
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video.
On the other hand
,
people
need to be free to
access
the
information
they need, because restriction can hamper
people
activity.
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, some web
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internet
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need
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an arm and leg cost to use.
For example
, based on my experience, I felt hard to found a journal
whick
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which
provide
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complete information
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information
because the
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so high to got
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and it made me struggle to find an appropriate source. In conclusion,
internet
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must provide
a
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free
access
,
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but must have a filter to avoid
people
access
negative content.
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