Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had huge impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

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digitalisation
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everything is related
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electronic gadgets from morning to evening .
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agree with the statement that it has a strong impact on
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person
as well as the whole
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person
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a network site named
facebook
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.the main intension of
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one is to find new friends and chat with them.they provide a huge amount of features
such
as messaging,video and voice calling and the list goes on.but some are misusing it in many ways from
demading
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demanding
money from a
person
by blackmailing them with some photos shared by them in the past.even though the sites provide
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amount of privacy policies some hackers are misusing the data by hacking their account and spreading their profile all over the internet.many persons are wasting time by using them all
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day.
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, the society or the whole
system
is being
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by
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one.
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if some incident
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in the
system
,someone posts a video about
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telling something . at
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everyone believes them and starts supporting them without knowing the truth in the case of
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incident
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recently.after knowing the real scenario they start supporting the other
person
. anything like
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is putting them in the
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dilemma
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which one did
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support.by using
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sites
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all
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them but some of them are creating
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to the
system
.and some companies are selling the data of their users by violating the company policies.
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conclude that
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the
system
and the individuals should take of themselves
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while utilising the features provided by the anonymous applications.because everything is hackable
now a days
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.so the
compnies
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companies
should need to step forward to overcome
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because they are the real creators.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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