Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes life more enjoyable, others, however, think it is a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

People
always argue about watching
TV
; some say it is advisable
,
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because it makes us happy and feels good. While some others are against
this
argument, as they feel it wastes our precious
time
unnecessarily. Personally, I believe both arguments have some valid points.
Therefore
I do not completely agree or disagree with both statements. Watching
TV
is useful in many ways for humans. From the invention of
TV
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it has become a hobby for millions of
people
worldwide. From childhood to the elderly, all most all watch
TV
every day. It helps them to relax enjoy and learn.
For example
, in many ,families it became a routine to watch
TV
as a family together in the evening. It is their family
time
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common interest. It helps them to learn new things and discuss their thoughts. By watching
TV
regularly; news and programmes many
people
learn about current world affairs, politics and other interesting happenings around them. Many youngsters find a way to relieve their academic and work stress by watching
TV
only when their alone and away from home. On the other ,hand there are some other disadvantages
also
there on
TV
. Addiction to
TV
programmes mainly movies and talk show leading to
time
mismanagement. Some
people
waste their productive and precious
time
in front of screens for nothing.
finally
, It leads to a sedentary lifestyle and eventually makes them lazy and less active. Wasting too much
time
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TV
make
people
sick and obese. Reason survey found that
people
who are watching
TV
for more than 4hours per day found to be more obese and less productive than their counterpart of the same age and sex. So it is obvious that
people
should not addict to
TV
and limiting
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screen
time
is essential. In conclusion, watching
tv
is greatly beneficial if it is limited to a
time
frame and useful programs, only by
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people
can find joy and happiness.
Otherwise
, it leads to screen addiction and ultimately ended up
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health consequences and
time
-wasting.
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