Young people spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing , tech.) What is the reason ? Is it a positive or negative development?

My father finishes his shopping in almost half an hour.Nowadays, middle-aged
people
have spent most of their precious time and money on the latest
fashion
trends.
This
essay, will discuss the cause behind
this
change and explain whether, it is a positive or negative development. In past days, you find hardly 2 or 3 shops in a town for shopping,
However
, present days you could see at least one or 2 shops per street. The major expansion of the
fashion
business caused to attract more
people
towards
fashion
, Developing technology
also
helped these
people
to sell their products online.
Younger
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generation is the primary target for the business
people
,
whoom
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whom
they work on
fashion
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the fashion
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side, because,
past
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the past
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community already habituated to old
fashion
might they don't show interest
on
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in
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buying new
fashion
things, and younger
people
has much knowledge on buying online products rather than old
people
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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