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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The wealth of a nation is its
people
. Even in
this
 twenty-
first
 century millions of
people
 living in poor
nations
 do not have access to health care facilities or education. Since their governments lack the financial means to improve their living standards, some
people
 feel that the rich
nations
 should help them by providing financial aid. I agree with
this
 argument. In my
opinion
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 when rich
nations
 help poor
nations
, it is a win-win situation for both. Rich
nations
 have excess funds. By giving financial aid to poor
nations
, they can improve the living standards in the
third
-world. Poverty is the root cause of many social evils. It is a well-known fact that poor countries are the breeding grounds of several anti-social elements. The poor, in general, are unhappy with their own lives. They are
also
 angry with the rich. Needless to say, many of them have criminal tendencies. It is not possible to reform them without improving their living standards. By providing financial assistance to poor
nations
, the rich countries can alleviate poverty in those
nations
 and make the world a more peaceful place to live in. Giving financial assistance to poor
nations
 makes excellent business sense too. When poor
nations
 develop, the purchasing power of their
people
 will increase.
This
 provides a great opportunity for rich
nations
 that are
also
 the hub of manufacturing. By helping the poor grow, they can increase their wealth too. To conclude, when rich
nations
 give financial assistance to poor
nations
, they are not only being generous but
also
 helping their own industries and
people
. Irrespective of our gender, nationality or religion, everyone deserves access to good food, health and education.
Therefore
, in my opinion,
nations
 that have excess funds should use them for the betterment of poor
nations
. After all, we all belong to the family of humanity.
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