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2.Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some argue that
countries
 can be economically benefited and can
also
 have a healthy
environment
while
 others believe that it is impossible to possess these aspects as it's not compatible.
Although
, it is not easy to maintain the balance between the
economy
 and the
environs
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.I believe most of the nation is economically strong and
have
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 better surroundings.In
this
 ,essay I will be discussing both the views and the
notion
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i
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 support On
one
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 hand , Some people insist that these two ideas are not realistic, because
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countries
 having a strong
economical
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 background can be laid for having a spoiled
environment
 .
However
 , as per the World Economic records from the University of Australia, it is noticeable that most of the nations are facing challenges in terms of creating a better
environment
.
For instance
, China is leading in second place for holding the strongest
economy
 but to see the darker side it has a spoiled
environment
 and as the government is aware of it there are no major actions taken on it .
Thus
 it is understandable for people to argue
about
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 the
countries
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 economic success and environmental success
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 impossible
On the other hand
 , There
a
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few nations
accomplished
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this
 two
objective
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 and
having
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 a balanced lifestyle as well ,
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 the idea itself to comes from these
countries
 . To illustrate , Singapore is well known for its
economical
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 factors but it
as
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has
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also
 been praised for the
environment
for
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the
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its
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 original state , By implying
the
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CNG bikes and
car
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, reducing the use of plastic and nurturing the
environment
this
 country has achieved its goal In conclusion, despite the fact that some nations are unable to maintain the balance between nature and the
countries
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country's
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economy
 both developing and developed
countries
needs
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 to find
a
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 effective and different approach to maintain the
economy
 and the environmental balance
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