Some people believe that teenager should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time . This can be benefit teenagers and the community as well . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the ultramodern epoch, it is a point of debate that the group of
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should help
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poor
people
who have not money or things to live
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life. Undoubtedly,
this
notion remains successful in keeping the majority in its favour. The upcoming paragraphs would cast light on my argument related to very conception. I wholeheartedly concur with the statement that those
people
who belong from 13 to 18 should do something for
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.
These myriad reason
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in favour of my argument, intelligent pupils should help to children those have
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house for living and they are lived in footpath side of the road. They have not money
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eat
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to food
then
how they start their
study
in school. Pupils should help
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them in
study
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for unpaid because if they will educate they can achieve some good jobs and
this
effect is
also
good
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a good
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impact on
country
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economy. To add a few more reason, how can one forget about?
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there is some
also
have cons
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. To justify the some, there is
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of if juvenile doing unpaid work in
community
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they will face some problem. They are
also
student
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and they have not
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a lot
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lot
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of time. If they will go help for
community
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they can
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of
study
. Apart from all
this
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they will disappoint
from
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the
people
who are
also
working for
community
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the community
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. And they will see the
people
who cannot get
job
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a job
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from the Government and in good company. Even they are well educated and have
high
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degree from
university
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.
This
is definitely
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impact on student. They will distract from their
study
. On a final note, I am of the opinion there are different pros and cons about help to
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as there is not any plausible argument against the very phenomenon.
Submitted by Kamaljot Singh on

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