Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. -How far do you agree? -What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?

Nobody can deny that there are certain professionals like nurses, doctors and teachers who are essential to the fabric of society, and who should
therefore
be rewarded
accordingly
.
However
,
this
is seldom the case. When we look at the salaries and fees commanded by certain film stars and actresses and
people
who run large companies,
this
does not seem fair. First of all, not all film stars earn huge sums of money. In fact, at any one time in the
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UK,
for example
, roughly 80 per cent of actors are out of work and on top of that the the number who are paid so-called ‘telephone number fees’ is even smaller. One must
also
remember that the
career
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of many actors are very short and that
therefore
the money they earn has to be spread over many years. The same applies to company bosses. Stating a set of criteria as to how much
people
should be painting a set of criteria as to how much
people
should be paid is not easy. The idea of performance-related pay is very much in vogue at the moment. Rewarding
people
according to
qualifications has long been used as a yardstick for paying
people
, but it is not a consistently good measure. Another is years of relevant experience, but there are many cases where a younger person can perform a task better than someone with lots of experience. Whatever criteria are used to assess salaries, an ongoing cycle will develop.
This
will create pressure in other areas.
This
considered,
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I feel that certain key professionals should have their salaries assessed by independent review bodies on an ongoing basis so that they do not fall behind.
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