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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We are living in
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 21 century, but
still
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 every
country
 has
poverty
. The biggest reasons in my opinion are the
economy
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 structure of the
country
 and the lack of
education
, which I will discuss in detail in
this
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Firstly
, the economic structure of the
country
 makes the greatest contribution
in
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country's
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the country's
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 development and the population which lives under
poverty
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 line. Some
countries
 have the best
economy
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 structure, but
still
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 they miss the point where to focus to reduce the number of poor
people
. In my opinion, each
country
 must have the same regulations for poor and rich
people
, where everyone has
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equal right. To reduce the number of poor
people
,
countries
 should make some separate laws for considering the situation.
For example
, a
country
 can impose low TAX's on poor
people
 for
first
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 few years to give them a chance to improve their financial situation.
Secondly
,
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education
 makes
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 significant amount of impact on
poverty
.
Illitrate
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Illiterate
people
 will not be able to earn
the
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 significant amount of money to support their family needs and they will just have to rely on the labour work. They will earn by doing the labour work, but will not be able to earn enough, and they
wil
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will
 be pressed under the burden of
the
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poverty
 day by day. Each
countries
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sould
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should
could
would
 have some laws regarding
the
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basic
education
.
Countries
 should provide free
education
 to encourage the
people
. To recapitulate, all
countries
 should have
a
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 economic
strucature
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structure
 which include the
people
 of all financial class
,
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 and must encourage the
people
 to increase the
litracy
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literacy
 rate by providing free
education
. As it is truly said, "
Education
 is the
birth right
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birthright
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 of every child."
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