Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care. This was not so in the past. What may be the root cause of this behaviour? Discuss the reasons and possible results.

In recent times,
skincare
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is no longer limited to one gender, as both genders have been noticed to splurge on
this
. Many are of the opinion that it never used to be
this
way. I will be addressing why I believe more people are spending more money on
skincare
because of awareness, and
also
what the effects of
this
could be. In the past, beautifying oneself
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something that was attributed to just one gender, the female gender.
Men
who took the time to care about appearances were seen as weak or not masculine enough. Think about it, if you saw a man applying sunscreen on the train 5 years ago, what would your reaction be?
However
,
that is
no longer the situation. A study done in 2015 showed that more and more
men
were coming down with different skin problems.
Hence
, dermatologist around the world has made it their
lives
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goal to not just create
skincare
products that enhance
the
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beauty, but
also
heal
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ailments even before they occur.
As a result
of
this
enlightenment, the percentage of
men
having dermatologic problems drastically reduced. Because of
this
, we see more
men
spending on their bodies
like
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never
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ever
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before.
As a result
of both genders being interested in
skincare
like never before, there's now a huge economic boom in the
skincare
industry. In Nigeria, in the year 2020, it was shown that over a million dollars were spent on the importation of beauty products (the return
of
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investment was over 28%). With
this
level of profits studied, there are more jobs created in the industry,
thus
reducing the level of unemployment. In conclusion, looking beautiful is no longer gender-based but now universal. Regardless of your biological configuration, you can
also
spend as much more as you want on looking beautiful.
Skincare
has proven to be very versatile; beautifying the human race
while
enhancing the economy.
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