In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In recent times, private
cooperations
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are fueling and conducting
most
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advanced scientific
research
as compared to government entities. In my personal opinion, scientific
research
in private
companies
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more advantages than disadvantages.
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de-cypher my standpoint in detail. In
this
age of internet and
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networking, private
companies
are competing for scientific
research
grants in international markets, which helps them to improve with each project to set the highest
research
standards in the field of science. Private
companies
have streamlined standard operating procedures which are free from delays as compared
compared
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to government entities which
help
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them focus completely on
research
rather than operational issues.
Moreover
, Private
companies
have better
pays
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packages, employee trust and
healthy
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work environment which in turn help boost
productivity
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of the company.
Although
private
companies
in their early stages lack market contacts
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which
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these
companies
take time to secure initial big projects and secure
client's
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trust in the market. For that reason,
large
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portion of private
companies
in their initial times run
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financial problems or even bankruptcy.
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due to
vast
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market and competitive salaries in
private
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the private
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sector,
employee
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employees
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do not usually stay for longer periods and change jobs frequently resulting in to
less
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number of permanent employees. All in all, In conclusion, I think that private
companies
and way ahead of government entities in
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term
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of scientific
research
. They have
most
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advanced
equipments
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equipment
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, highly educated researchers and are more eager to take
risk
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risks
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and challenges.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • groundbreaking technologies
  • efficiently allocate resources
  • innovative projects
  • strict timelines
  • profit motives
  • basic research
  • commercial application
  • corporate funding
  • biases in research
  • unbiased exploration
  • balanced exploration
  • public sector
  • private sector
  • synergy
  • comprehensive outcomes
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