many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, the discussion regarding whether the government should regard the economic developments of the entire country as their top
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priorities
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debate among the public. In my honest opinion,
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believe that even though it is vitally important to reach optimum economic
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growth
, other
indicators
should
also
not be neglected. On the one hand, it is inevitable for the policies maker to put economic
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growth
as their top priorities.
This
is because,
first
, in comparison to other
indicators
like the human
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development
index, it is far from difficult for the politicians to keep the economic
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growth
at a constant rate since, in the end, the construction of
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infrastructure
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dramatically increase the economic
development
, and of which can be easily accomplished by the
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.
Secondly
, the economic
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growth
is
also
more measurable than other
indicators
like adult literacy rate, since it is hard to distinguish the illiterate from the literate.
However
, for
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process, the gross domestic
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can be easily measured by
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multiplying
the amount of the products that
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produced in the country
last
year and their own prices. All in all
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two factors can let the politicians
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get a higher political achievement and
this
may serve as the reason why they seek economic growth as the most important indicator.
on the other hand
, it is
also
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undeniably
undeniable
that other
indicators
especially the one for the all-rounded
development
should be
also
given a decent position in terms of
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importance. Confused by the economic
development
, the entire public may be
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misguided
and
therefore
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key aspect of
development
in their society progresses given that they only consider the economic growth. to sum
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the above-mentioned statements,
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even though
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economic
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is important, other
indicators
should
also
be taken into consideration when deciding the policies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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