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some people say that art (e.g.: painting, poetry, music) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Art
 is one of the tools to express yourself through painting, music poetry etc. Lots of famous
people
 from our history have that talent that why some experts think it can be made by only those
people
 who have the unique
ability
 and others think opposite of
this
. They think it's for everyone. I will discuss both views and give my opinion on the latter view.
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 of
people
 believe there is no extraordinary
ability
 need for artist work whereas
other
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 argue that it is
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 inborn talent.
To begin
 with, Everyone has their own interest since in
this
 digital world learning a new
art
 quite easy these days because there are lots of institutes or you can learn on youtube
for instance
 if want to learn dance so there are lots of videos in there with discrepancy tutors with flexible timing . so that, you can Expert in your genre.
on the other hand
, some
people
 born star. they have their own unique
ability
 by birth,
For example
, Micheal Jackson is famous for his special
ability
 his dance moves still juvenile try to copy them but can't match him,
therefore
art
 is not for everyone.
although
 they have their special abilities, they have to work hard To conclude
Art
 and craft is a unique talent and it's not easy to learn but In my , opinion anyone learns a new skill through practice and hard work they become successful in their field, even so, need more patience and focus.
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