Many teenagers now have their own smartphones.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion

Due to
increase
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in technologies and
modernization
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everyone is using
smartphones
but
younger
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the younger
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population spend more time on phones.There
are
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is
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number
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a number
the number
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of positive and negative impacts of using smartphone in excess on
teenagers
.I will give my opinion in
next
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the next
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paragraph.
To begin
with,
smartphones
help in increasing the intellectual power of
teenagers
as well as adults as there are many applications are available
in
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phones which enhance their
problem solving
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problem-solving
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ability.
For instance
,
word
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a word
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puzzle game helps them to learn some new word which they can use in their daily life.
Moreover
, when
teenagers
go abroad for their studies they can call their family members as they feel connected with them through video calling from miles of distance.
Smartphones
also
plays
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a vital role in studies as they are having some sort of problem in any question can google it and solve their difficulties in minutes.
However
,
smartphones
have some negative impact on young children because they spend more of their spare time on
phone
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the phone
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which decreases the social attraction and it
also
affects their bonding with their loved ones.
In addition
to
this
,
smartphones
also
affects
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eye sight
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eyesight
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if
teenagers
use
phone
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the phone
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in excess.
For instance
, In 2020 Research showed that
teenagers
have
high
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a high
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number of spectacles than older age.
Moreover
, phones sometimes
also
results
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result
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in loss of money because there are different type of games in
smartphones
from which some are not free and child purchase it while playing which is not good for them. In my opinion,
smartphones
are helpful
at
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some extent but excess of everything is dangerous for physical as well as mental health.Parents should have to take some serious action or they have to spend more time with kids and bring them to outings
etcetra
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etcetera
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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